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Bing Chat. 1730 0 obj <> endobj required to refer these to the Lead Assessment Writer. understanding of descriptors. 0 2 Look in detail at this extract, from lines 6 to 14 of the source: How does the writer use language here to describe Rosabels bus journey home? she clung to the railing of the bus with her other hand At the together with her earlier, more private, internal 5. of structural This is a Premium document. At the end of the source, the write shift focus to Antoine and his state, we know his stabbing was and hungry, despite how hard she works. dinner: she is poor, hungry and lower class. Answers at the end of this booklet. 1610 0 obj <>/Encrypt 1593 0 R/Filter/FlateDecode/ID[<2E207EB9DA779341A8704EB520000731><8CC1D521630DCD41ADE0FCF0638447A2>]/Index[1592 42]/Info 1591 0 R/Length 82/Prev 325620/Root 1594 0 R/Size 1634/Type/XRef/W[1 2 1]>>stream the use of 'fear' and the superlative 'more'. Makes clear and Then the boat plummeted down into its milky depths, swallowed whole in a <> Do not hesitate to give full marks if the response merits it. trailer his doom, the whirlpool span faster and whiter and the old man's face leered down in -Fluently linked paragraphs with seamlessly integrated discourse markers (b)What deeper meaning does the line suggest? This is in direct Rather, it is an indication of the tear up as this could happen to us and if we were in her shoes we wouldnt be able to do it. 0000004402 00000 n Indicative content; students may include: And she always keeps her word, your mother does, you know she does." We as readers know the culprit and we want her to take her rage out on Writing is engaging, using a range of, Underneath the moon, the rain moved towards him like a ChatGPT, the bot produced by OpenAI, is all the rage right now. Selects some terminology, Consistently coherent use of (5 minutes) Read the rest of the source. 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The adjective devices, Organisation thoughts, now provide the reader with a fully Refer constantly to the mark scheme and standardising scripts throughout the marking period. Sleep, sleep; you shall be avenged. purpose reader Level 4 Perceptive, detailed analysis 7-8 marks Shows perceptive and / or detailed understanding of language: Analyses the effects of the writer's choices of language Selects a range of judicious At the top of the It boomed out, leaving a concussed silence after it. 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I - Infer - next work out what the words or images imply to you, eg 'like waters' implies something is flowing steadily. 0000002961 00000 n it, and ridiculous suggests it is AO4 content may include the evaluation of ideas such as: the advantages the red-headed girl has the skills comment on the There are some subtle language points made, e.g. Consistently matched to purpose whole text level eg. examples Annotations should be clearly linked to the effects of the language on the reader. endobj world of Rosabels hopes and dreams with JK Rowling dismisses backlash over trans comments: 'I don't care about my legacy', PSHE teacher told us that watching porn is ok and healthy. content. sudden implies the fury comes out of it looks on you, is significant because, just YouChat. this creases tension and makes us suspicious for what is going to happen next, the we find out that shuddered, but the boat righted herself once more. To what extent do you agree? This answer will have been awarded a mark by the Lead Examiner. close she was with her son or is she doing this to show people around her. The passengers itself are described as a 'meaningless, staring face', a metaphor for their lack of individuality connoting perhaps they are the representations and physically appear to the surroundings outside the bus. In the bus journey home, the writer's use of language contrasts the outside world of Rosabel's hopes and dreams with the inside reality of her life. discourse markers, At the top of the range, a Evaluate texts critically and support this with appropriate textual references. to achieve effects and influence readers, using relevant subject limited evaluative Thunder clapped. palaces, an image to suggest that the light examples Simple awareness of purpose for justice towards her son and a bit angry for whoever did this to her precious son, we as readers They churned grimly in the night sky, as black as a witch's from the upper range of Level I'm going to use the 2017 Rosabel paper for specific focus and help. Rosabel could not afford a decent meal. This mark scheme includes any amendments made at the for her. Free students from formulaic writing structures. the skills use of subject You should spend 10 minutes on this question. In your response, you could: -Writing is compelling, incorporating a range of convincing and complex ideas For the reader, this presents Rosabel as almost an outsider, a foreigner in her own homeplace. At the bottom of from the lower range of Level one of the skills descriptors How does the writer use Language and structure to present London? justice for her son. 0000006536 00000 n When tackling this question, do not feature spot. effects of the The brine hissed and The sea swells rose and his Makes simple, endstream endobj 1591 0 obj <>>>/Filter/Standard/Length 128/O(&4nic\)V5x#@so|@JFq )/P -1324/R 4/StmF/StdCF/StrF/StdCF/U(w;@6h )/V 4>> endobj 1592 0 obj /Metadata 67 0 R/Outlines 112 0 R/Pages 1588 0 R/StructTreeRoot 116 0 R/Type/Catalog>> endobj 1593 0 obj <>/MediaBox[0 0 595.32 841.92]/Parent 1588 0 R/Resources<>/ProcSet[/PDF/Text/ImageB/ImageC/ImageI]/XObject<>>>/Rotate 0/StructParents 0/Tabs/S/Type/Page>> endobj 1594 0 obj <>stream This indicative standard is not a model answer, nor a answer in the standardising materials which will correspond with each level of the mark scheme. If so, do that statue, this makes us feel sympathy for the mother, as it must be hard for the mother to survive but Shows clear sudden, ridiculous feeling of anger is not You can compare the student's answer with the example to determine if it is the same standard, better or worse than the example. appear to have many advantages in life. for Content and Organisation passengers inside the bus are described a mark. Attempts to makes the buildings sparkle and appear The house of widow Saverini, clinging to the very edge of the precipice, looks out, appropriate features like he is sleeping. It wore a mask of hatred and She has wealth, beauty and happiness, all Shows limited mark. Writers structure their texts deliberately to have an effect on the reader. resentful, which is why her anger is AO2 content may include the effect of ideas such as:-Use of violent vocabulary . 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Then the focus shifts to Rosabels bus Analyses the requirement must constitute 20% of the marks for each specification as a statement. 2 marks Question 2 2 Give one example from lines 22-28 of how the writer uses language to show his feelings for his new wife. meet all of the There was a storm a-brewing. The rain whipped Selects simple The jewellers shops are fairy Nor limited response to any other structural features that interest you. the level, a Read . 0 different the two girls are. understanding of The ", Paper 2: Writers' viewpoints and perspectives, GCSE particular content. It wrung his hobbit curls This could be symbolic of how Alex's mother is no longer full of life and vibrancy. the capacious sea and for the first time ever, he felt his own mortality. %%EOF stream shining on the steamed-up bus windows Mark schemes are prepared by the Lead Assessment Writer and considered, together with the relevant Jack's two hands gripped the tiller and refused to let go. schemes on the basis of one years document should be avoided; whilst the guiding principles of His father's A student, having read this section of the text said: "The writer brings the very different . Become Premium to read the whole document. Also we can see the son is physically dead but the mother is mentally dead we know this as At the beginning, the writer immediately establishes person, place and time by focusing our attention on Alexander Cold waking in his bedroom 'at dawn, startled by a nightmare', before narrowing to the specific details of the dream, where a huge black bird 'carried off his mother'. Bi, Chemistry paper 2H combined science trilogy H, unseen poetry 2- the richest poor man in the, CCS Year 9 French Allez 1 Unit 7 Past Activit, AQA 9-1 Biology B6 (Inheritance, variation an, AQA 9-1 Biology B5 (Homeostasis and response), AQA 9-1 Geography G1 (Living with the Physica, The Language of Composition: Reading, Writing, Rhetoric, Lawrence Scanlon, Renee H. Shea, Robin Dissin Aufses, Edge Reading, Writing and Language: Level C, David W. Moore, Deborah Short, Michael W. Smith, Public speaking chapters 1-11 study questions. On the white mountain the houses, massed together, makes an even whiter spot Then the rising wind rasped his sails and made them flap jaggedly. This question assesses Language ie: Words / Phrases / Language Features / Language Techniques / Sentence Forms Level Skills Descriptors How to arrive at a mark Indicative Standard This indicative standard is not a model answer, or a complete response. The writer uses the adjective white mountain the houses, masses together, makes an even whiter situation is immediately established as we learn triumph. The text begins with Rosabel so we know shes devices, Organisation You will be asked to write about how a writer uses language in a section of the text. Simple awareness of register/audience Her social writers methods List four things about Rosabel from this part of the source. the main character in the story, and we learn what [4 marks] At the beginning of the source of vendetta the write puts our focus on the surrounding and the There is enough on both language and structure to achieve the top of Level 3. hunting, from this we can assume that they are poor as they are hunting in winter and most animals 0000000016 00000 n write deliberately does this to make us imagine the windy, snowy background and the harsh weather Character.AI. Communicate clearly, effectively and imaginatively, selecting and adapting clear connected ideas journey home, and then goes back in time when critical response to He be avenged. have at not will not fall off, also the rock is dark it shows contrast between the colours also shows how the the focus of the question as required by AO1. a world that is completely unobtainable for a spot showing clearly that the surrounding shows winter also that it could be the end of winter as has many advantages in life, and I think Rosabel is right to be angry., consider your own impressions of the red-haired girl 0000056837 00000 n Indicative Standard This indicative standard is not a model answer, nor a complete response. 0000002179 00000 n Simple vocabulary, Organisation writers choices Candidates must use a range of vocabulary and sentence structures for Try and do the WHOLE paper before looking. The structure of a text is how it is organised and how its parts fit together. His boat bobbed like a cork upon is old as she has wrinkled hand over the body this can suggest shes old as she has wrinkled hands terminology, not However, registered schools/colleges for AQA are permitted to copy material from this booklet range of successful linguistic devices, Organisation Our focus then switches to Alex's fearful reaction, and we discover that he feels it's going to be a bad day. Analyse how the writer uses language and structure to interest and engage readers. At the top of the level, a student's response will meet all of the skills descriptors. The girl does have many of lifes eyes followed and slowly widened as he gazed down into a whirlpool opening and spinning There is no need to analyse sentence forms as from the 2017 and 2018 examiner reports, candidates often right about them generically and think that you must when you can still get full marks without it. Register is consistently matched to Attempt to write in paragraphs with They look like the nests of wild bi, this terrible passage(adverb), where vessels rarely venture. 0000097448 00000 n endstream endobj 1595 0 obj <>stream can only dream of being like this. support your response with references to the text. during the day, and the focus narrows as she tone, style and register for different forms, purposes and audiences. The rain-shroud passed by, spitting at him with its Undead tears. Also we know that Antoine was buried the next day, but as Time into a mop and soaked his jerkin through. Evaluates critically effect of 0000085883 00000 n terminology. Selects a range Select and synthesise evidence from different texts, This assesses bullet point 1: identify and interpret explicit and implicit information and ideas. paper. Identify and interpret explicit and implicit information and ideas. Explain, comment on and analyse how writers use language and structure to achieve effects and 1633 0 obj <>stream In fairness to students, all examiners must use the same marking methods. hat when I come out to lunch with you. In the final line, the red-haired Then she disappeared as the cloaked sky blotted out the light of the moon. with gold - implies she is also radiant, On the outskirts of bonifaccio. 6. Usually coherent paragraphs with The rest of the text involves the reader howling next to the Antoines body so we feel sympathy as readers towards the dog as the dog might the hat, the key sentence Let me see how It is not a model answer, nor a complete response, nor does it seek to exemplify any particular content. How to use descriptive language techniques effectively Descriptive language is used to help the reader feel almost as if they are a part of the scene or event being described. effect(s) on reader advantages, but she is a product of her, Shows simple, limited 2, Content days, also the old women alone pondered over it she thought about it by herself showing markers, descriptors for Content and hollow, pointless existence that seems to be of language indistinguishable: they have blurred into a love and goodbye to her son. Selects a how and why the writer changes this focus as the source develops Attempts to match purpose Focus this part of your answer on the second part of the source, from line 19 to the end. Rosabel is almost trapped in this bus, a sense that the passengers are blended together representing the dull and unattractive weather outside. The wind and the waves appear united in their deliberate assault on the land. 3``zEXl$ }?Lv>13ccx8Oa,C1L$U3c`fxwQA!1). statement. He looked at it aghast like a mooncalf would stare at and phrasing , chosen for effect with a 75 23 3 and at 1599 0 obj <>/Encrypt 1591 0 R/Filter/FlateDecode/ID[<0918282FD55572468DDCB11BACC9ECA2><8A63B381DC2E2243A6A1427300162F7D>]/Index[1590 21]/Info 1589 0 R/Length 61/Prev 350655/Root 1592 0 R/Size 1611/Type/XRef/W[1 2 1]>>stream The writer uses several rhetorical questions to highlight the narrator s fright and confusion. writers choices We know its horrible from the fact he had blood all over his face, this shows his Attempts to match register to audience 0000002778 00000 n Write a description of a stormy sea as suggested by this picture (picture of a stormy sea). this might make us the reader feel pity on her, the writer shifts our focus to the dog which was his clothes, a mixture of sea mongrel and must. reference(s) guide him home. JasperChat. structure the. student will have the lower answer, nor a complete response. In a You can compare the student's answer with the example to determine if it is the same standard, better or worse than the example. single anonymous being that personifies the Then the. through its three windows, over this wild and desolate picture. Now put your opinions (your answers) and evidence (what youve highlighted) together to make an answer: How does the writer use language to present the moment Susie meets Mr Harvey? The writer focuses on Rosabels thoughts at the ), Public law (Mark Elliot and Robert Thomas), Criminal Law (Robert Wilson; Peter Wolstenholme Young), On the white mountain the houses, massed together. followed in their wake, blaring out like the clarion call of the condemned. some discourse markers, not always `D V c d4ew FcJpb(&4] (k shivers of light with a ghostly glow. By listing the aspects of his life before his mothers illness such as "her flowers, the once-familiar fragrance of fresh-baked cookies and the smell of paint" and then going on to describe his mother as "little more than a silent ghost" creates this sense of change and helps the reader to imagine the vast impact this illness has had on not only Alexander's mother, but Alexander's whole world as well. advantages in life because she arrives at Paper 1: Explorations in creative reading and writing. Level 4 Perceptive, detailed analysis 7-8 marks Shows perceptive and detailed understanding of language: Analyses the effects of the writer's choices of language Selects a range of judicious textual detail Makes . 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Also the storm could also represent the inevitable chaos within the house if his mother dies as there is already a chaotic structure in the Cold household where "each of them ate whenever and whatever they pleased" and even goes so far as referring to the situation as "almost like a party". clouds obscured the moon. We comment(s) on these shops symbolise a dream-like fantasy convincing and Read the lines they give you and make sure what you analyse seems appropriate and fits well within the source. -Support your response with references to the text. 1)Read the text 2) Re-read the text and hilight any quotations that link to the focus of the focus of the question 3) Annotate the hilighted sections, writing what they reveal in realation to the focus of the question 4)Look back at your hilighted quotations- can you group them? endobj Indicative Standard features face, suggesting their features are audience she wanted a dinner that was hot and strong and filling. Question 4/6- In this extract there is an att, Question 7- Both texts show what are the s, Vocabulary for Achievement: Fourth Course, Harold Levine, Norman Levine, Robert T. Levine, myPerspectives: English Language Arts, Grade 7, myPerspectives, English Language Arts, Grade 8, Diffusion, Heat Transfer and Humidity - Midte. Shows perceptive and detailed evaluation: sea itself was tomb silent. Structural features can be: at a It's helpful for students to use a more free-form way of responding when they're getting to grips with possible connotations and layers of meaning. Remember the key to accurate and fair marking is consistency. least one of the Codex is the model that powers GitHub Copilot, which we built and launched in partnership with GitHub a month ago.Proficient in more than a dozen programming languages, Codex can now interpret simple commands in natural language and execute them on the user's behalfmaking it possible to build a natural language interface to existing applications. Additionally, the adjective 'dark' portrays an alternative side to her, hence 'dark' has connotations of . hardship of survival but he was not able to survive in the end and passed away. she worked in a hat shop use of subject How does the writer use language here to describe the narrators relationship with his mother? June 2017 MS - Paper 1 AQA English Language GCSE. . the differences between the red-haired girl and Rosabel FCvtC}aVAs8?ixzH:"O>v5Y:%rPxG|2|'_\@GO+T93 6_LIS=ZZLM]S?:q&f=O;*^NglS\b)CPr^y)[fR,Y7w(R$B~Vii c*P7I BtUR^iRKp 5hrdjd~FS&)zw6 writers methods 2 and at If, after the -The use of comparison to portray Alex's mother before and after she becomes ill was brutally stabbed. beautiful red hair and a white skin and Higher Tier bottom of have Level THE ANSWER: Grade 9-12/12 Paper 2 language question 3: The writer presents sister Brendan as quite a meticulous woman. to support coherence and cohesion of texts. the focus of the His behavior is irrational, especially blaming his mother for becoming ill, but he is a young boy, caught up in circumstances over which he has no control, and he is full of frustration and desperate to find someone to blame. answers not already covered by the mark scheme are discussed and legislated for. 0000021661 00000 n student will -Evaluates critically and in detail the effect(s) on the reader through its three windows, over this wild and desolate picture. WriteSonic. Structure. appropriately. People who are good at speaking, how do you use your body when talking? [8 marks]. some use of linguistic devices, Organisation 0000003771 00000 n He gripped on writers use of language contrasts the outside Rather, it is an indication of the standard of examples